Hi guys,in term 1 my class and I made"Summer Haiku's"it's basically a poem but with a twist,the first line has 5 syllables,second 7 and the third 5.Anyways here's mine
Thanks for Google slide and the photographer for this beautiful photo.
Talofa Anisa! I really like descriptive words.It really reminds me of winter. Maybe next time you could have a better background, but otherwise it's really great!
What a cool haiku! I quite like your first sentence. I am currently picturing the grass outside my house covered in all white but looking like a nice fluffy blanket. Do you think if your title is a bit bigger it might stand out a bit more? Maybe? I like your jumper in your profile pic :)
Wow Anisa Such a beautiful haiku, I like how you wrote it about winter instead of summer. Your words made winter sound elegant but very cold. Its sad we don't get snow in Auckland but I could visualize it thanks to your haiku.
I liked how you described for the reader what a Haiku Poem was. Your class always does nice Poetry work which is well presented. I notice that you placed an acknowledgement for your choice of background. Your Haiku Poem did make me feel cosy when I read the word "Blanketed". I wonder if by making the title of your poem in a larger text would it stand out more.
Nice Anisa! Hope you know who I am If you don't I'm Charmy from your last years class. Anyways, awesome words. It made me feel like I was in a place with snow and snowflakes dripping from the sky. Well done Anisa.
Talofa Anisa! I really like descriptive words.It really reminds me of winter. Maybe next time you could have a better background, but otherwise it's really great!
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Hey Anisa
ReplyDeleteWhat a cool haiku! I quite like your first sentence. I am currently picturing the grass outside my house covered in all white but looking like a nice fluffy blanket. Do you think if your title is a bit bigger it might stand out a bit more? Maybe? I like your jumper in your profile pic :)
Wow Anisa
ReplyDeleteSuch a beautiful haiku, I like how you wrote it about winter instead of summer.
Your words made winter sound elegant but very cold.
Its sad we don't get snow in Auckland but I could visualize it thanks to your haiku.
Keep up the great poetry!
FROM MRS A @ NEW WINDSOR SCHOOL
ReplyDeleteKia ora Anisa
I liked how you described for the reader what a Haiku Poem was. Your class always does nice Poetry work which is well presented. I notice that you placed an acknowledgement for your choice of background. Your Haiku Poem did make me feel cosy when I read the word "Blanketed". I wonder if by making the title of your poem in a larger text would it stand out more.
I look forward to reading your next blog.
From Mrs A
Nice Anisa! Hope you know who I am If you don't I'm Charmy from your last years class. Anyways, awesome words. It made me feel like I was in a place with snow and snowflakes dripping from the sky. Well done Anisa.
ReplyDeleteHi Anisa,
ReplyDeleteWhat a creative piece of writing! Can't wait to see more!